Fanfic - Counting Stars: Clarity [Torchwood: Ianto]

So I was re-reading Counting Stars just to refresh my memory on character interactions, and - you know what, I think my writing's evolved. At any rate, I can see some things I don't like in that behemoth - a few poorly-handled POV changes, in particular. Oh well, lessons learned will be applied in future writing. At any rate, have a one-shot from that 'verse:

Title: Clarity
Rating(s): PG-13
Characters/Pairing(s): Dafydd (OC), Ianto, Toshiko, background Jack/Ianto
Warning(s): Homophobic attitudes (which eventually become more moderated, if that helps). Spoilers for Counting Stars, and all attendant changes etc made to canon within that ‘verse.
Summary: Dafydd hasn't been a good older brother, and he knows it.
Author's Notes: Counting Stars-verse – click here for the Master List. For those who don't want to read it, all you need to know is that Jack and Ianto have a telepathic connection, and Ianto may or may not be immortal (they’ll find out next time he dies, I suppose). Oh, also, Tosh and Owen survived the end of Season 2.
This fic is from the POV of Ianto's brother, Dafydd (a minor CS-verse OC).
This fic also references a previous one-shot in this 'verse, Chocolate Cheesecake.

( Clarity )

CC much appreciated. Also, FYI for those who might have missed it: there's a soundtrack for Counting Stars now available here.