Date: 2011-11-25 10:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] narurui.livejournal.com
I Like it. It was good. The only critasim i have is i think you shouldnt have put in "The next morning, he makes sure that he's presentable before he moves to his mirror." It just makes it seem like the story is longer then it is and the sentence before it is a great ending Love the story
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